Here is “Pika Ichi” chapter 4. I continue to like the main characters, Tarou and Hanako, and the side characters; Manaka, Dr. Murase, and Ibuki (introduced in this chapter), but the general story suffers from poor execution. I was ready to throw up my hands and quit the series after about 10-pages into translating this chapter, until after banging my head on my desk a few times and then breaking into hysterical laughter, it all became clear. I’m taking the bullying aspect of this story way too seriously and I’m probably ultra-sensitive because at the time I started the translation, the bullying induced suicides were all over the news in the US. So I adjusted my point of view and began to think of the bullying as a “McGuffin” and the student mob as a mob of brainless zombies. As a story about a handful of students and a brave doctor facing the zombie apocalypse, things made sense to me and I could focus on the aspects of the story I like, which would be the character development and the lovely artwork. The second hurdle was doing something about some of the flat or just plain bad dialog. So I will inform you now, for the most part I translated the chapter faithfully, but I did punch up some of the dialog to bring it up to high school level and to speed up and maintain the pacing.
I will continue onto chapter 5 because I want to know more about the characters. How did they get this way? What’s motivating them? And how will they change? But…it will be a chapter by chapter commitment and, so, I’ll face the question of whether to continue after looking at chapter 5. I really wish, though, that the chapters weren’t so freaking long!!! UGH!!! I’d much rather have fat “Magnolia” chapters! Magnolia!!!! UGH, the pain of waiting is almost too much!!!
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Anyhow, give the chapter a read and let me know what you think about it. If a lot of you want to try something new, I will gladly oblige. There are 4 replacement series on my mind that I would love to give a try and one is already in preparation :). And, oh, by the way, take the survey in the upper right corner of this blog!